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Donna Su's avatar

The building of tension but then the soft landing, you paint so well it’s like watching a movie that elicits physical reaction of stress and then a sigh of relief in a safe space. Bravo master wordsmith.

I think I’ve swallowed the hook. lol

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Gloria Horton-Young's avatar

I hope you have because I have fallen totally in love with my own characters! LOL

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Donna Su's avatar

Yesss they are so wonderful! Thank you for creating them!

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Gloria Horton-Young's avatar

It’s my pleasure.

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TCinLA's avatar

Really excellent, Gloria. You've got me totally hooked into the story now.

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Gloria Horton-Young's avatar

Thanks. It is very interesting to research and write.

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Annette's avatar

The mystery, the intrigue, and tension building. The anticipation for what comes next … whew!

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Gloria Horton-Young's avatar

It's been a journey learning how to write long fiction and it's also addicting.

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Debbie Young's avatar

My second time reading this and still just as exiting Love this thank you Gloria

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Gloria Horton-Young's avatar

Thanks again for reading it for me.

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Teyani Whitman's avatar

I’m loving the intensity and the depth of the characters!

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Gloria Horton-Young's avatar

This story has become a portal into the craft of writing for me. Who knew it could be so much FUN.

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Teyani Whitman's avatar

It’s truly captivating

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Gloria Horton-Young's avatar

Thank you 🙏

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Bob Lewis's avatar

Awesome

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Gloria Horton-Young's avatar

Thank you, Bob.

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flo chapgier's avatar

Heavens Gloria it is so well written.

No wonder you are addicted to your characters ...

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Gloria Horton-Young's avatar

I can now understand how writers lose track of time.

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Trevor Stone Irvin's avatar

Excellante ...

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Samuel Langhorne Clemens's avatar

I devoured the ten chapters upon discovery! I'll be right there beside you when you paint your masterpiece....

Oh yeah, it's a really good to see you and see you are shinny like brand new!

#Whosyourfarmer.

All my love!!!

HEB3

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Gloria Horton-Young's avatar

Thank you. 🙏

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Samuel Langhorne Clemens's avatar

Thank you! When I stand with a plan you, I would classify you as a damn fine writer. Blows me away that you've only gotten better. I love it!

Say hello to the one who doesn't weaponize words....

.;)

Peace

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Wild Lion*esses Pride from Jay's avatar

Gloria,

Every choice here feels like a risk, like stepping onto ground that might hold or might give way beneath them. The surveillance isn’t just in the air—it’s in their bodies, in the way they move, in how they measure their own words before they even leave their mouths. I feel the weight of the state pressing in, not through brute force but through the quiet, insidious ways it seeps into everything. The Office of Cultural Integrity, the compliance checks, the way even a handshake holds an unspoken calculation. Trust isn’t just rare—it’s dangerous.

Reeves walks in with an answer, but answers in this world are double-edged. Vivian knows that, Riley knows that. They don’t have the luxury of belief, only the necessity of strategy. Every interaction is a test, but not in the way most people think. It isn’t about proving loyalty or intelligence. It’s about reading the air, about understanding what isn’t being said.

And yet, even here, even under this crushing weight, something else is happening. The moment by the window—Vivian’s exhaustion, Riley’s quiet insistence—it cuts through the machinery of the state, through the constant calculations. Trust, in a world like this, isn’t a feeling. It’s an act of resistance. A refusal to let the state dictate who they can care for, who they can risk for.

You write this with such precision. The dread isn’t loud, it isn’t exaggerated. It’s in the way people hesitate before they speak, in the way bureaucracy and brutality hold hands. In the way hope has to be disguised as something else. This isn’t just about the network or the mission—it’s about what remains human when the world is designed to strip that away.

Here is to you holding up shared humanity and the promise of something sensual, even erotic in all this craziness we live in.

Thank you for gifting us with your immeasurable talent of being a weaver of words with layers upon layers of meaning and double speak. It is masterful.

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Robert A M Ross's avatar

Breathtakingly brilliant! Bravissima ancora!

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Jennifer Granville's avatar

The story is so compelling, the characters rich, there is a sense of dread but also hope that there is good and it will prevail - all done with an elegant lightness of touch. Such a good read.

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𝐂𝐁 𝐌𝐚𝐬𝐨𝐧's avatar

A wonderful ebb and flow of tension and tenderness. Also, fabulous history lesson at the end!

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Laurel McIntosh's avatar

Such a wonderful poignant story. I love this so much.

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